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Lost. by ~brwncow:iconbrwncow:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Experimental




I can't sleep.

    I need to write something.

I need to write.
       Write.

There are so many things in my head
           Jumbled.
   UNorganized.         Chaotic


I don't know what to say
                  to Do.
                 ,to ThinK.

  I dont know what they want.
I know I need sleep
    I have a class tomorrow.
                   Today.
                   in 5 hours.

I need to sleep.

Maybe I'll have a good Idea while I'm writing.
           Thinking          Talking to myself.

Then again.
Maybe it'll just end up being some weird-ass structured poem.
         won't                  good.

I have a lot of things to say.
©2004-2009 ~brwncow
:iconbrwncow:

Author's Comments

So.. I'm .. lost... cause i should be sleeping.. but i"m not. this is totally experimantal. I've never done anything like this before.. If you can understand what i was doing, and how the line breaks work, I congratulate you. If you like it.. *shrug* tell me I guess. If you don't, and I wouldn't be surprised.. Tell me. I really won't be surprised either way lol.

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~xenithe Jan 12, 2004, 12:23:29 AM
i think like that too. i talk to myself a lot. haha. clever to use the whitespace
:iconselkiepunk:
~selkiepunk Jan 12, 2004, 11:44:28 AM
Ooooooooo! I think I'm in love. I think I follow what is going on, but then when I think I get it it all slips away from me again. You do what you do so well, I want more!!!! Way to go!

--
Life's an adventure...why not do it naked?

The fact that nobody understands you does not make you an artist!

Just a concerned healthcare professional...no big deal.
:iconbrwncow:
~brwncow Jan 12, 2004, 12:07:03 PM
You're the sweetest thing, you know that? :hug:

--
"Lay on, Macduff, and damned be he that first cries: 'hold, enough!'"
:iconselkiepunk:
~selkiepunk Jan 12, 2004, 12:57:11 PM
LOL!!!! I think that's the first time anyone has ever told me that.

--
Life's an adventure...why not do it naked?

The fact that nobody understands you does not make you an artist!

Just a concerned healthcare professional...no big deal.
:iconmssquid:
*mssquid Jan 15, 2004, 5:15:04 PM
the structuring makes it quite interesting, stream of conciousness is always fun

--
[unthought of]
:iconbloodytourniquet:
~bloodytourniquet Jan 16, 2004, 11:14:02 AM
that's awesome mike! i've seen people try to do this before but you did it wickedly!

playing with punctuation, spacing, captial letters, repeated ideas, random thoughts. all get the theme of "lost" across. sweet!

--
It can't rain all the time.....

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:iconbrwncow:
~brwncow Jan 16, 2004, 6:29:14 PM
Sweet! thanks :) I like trying new things ;)

--
"Lay on, Macduff, and damned be he that first cries: 'hold, enough!'"
:iconbrwncow:
~brwncow Jan 16, 2004, 6:33:35 PM
Hee. I'm glad ppl actually like this one.. Or at least find it interesting. :)

--
"Lay on, Macduff, and damned be he that first cries: 'hold, enough!'"
:iconbloodytourniquet:
~bloodytourniquet Jan 16, 2004, 7:01:38 PM
well good. everybody is so boring these days.

--
It can't rain all the time.....

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